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Ticket Id: 141559 Thursday, April 13, 2017 Many people believe that scientific researches should be carried out and controlled by the government rather than private company To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion? It is argued that the authority should be the one who conducts and manages scientific studies While I agree with this point of view to some extent, I strongly believe that private organizations are a better candidate taking responsibility for such essential research Admittedly, there are some good reasons why the government should be in charge of carrying and controlling scientific research Firstly, it is the budget from national taxes that supports scientists and researchers Therefore, the company in charge would receive money to complete their work without worrying about the depletion of resource Secondly, some dependent companies only look for profits, which makes it extremely dangerous For example, a company may find out a chemistry that can make biological weapons, and then may sell it to an antisocial party in Pakistan, this is certainly harmful to almost all human beings However, despite some argument above, I am of the opinion that private firms would the research mentioned much better Firstly, non-governmental companies usually pay a huge amount of money for their staff, this helps them attract more talented and skillful scientists to work for them As a result, scientific studies and papers conducted by these organizations are likely to be more accurate Secondly, as the authority has many aspects to take care of, independent firms often concentrate on one to two field, which helps to bring more proper results For example, MCG, which is a medical company in Binh Duong, only concentrates on particular fields that are researching and manufacturing new medicines, which makes it better than other governmental companies in Vietnam In conclusion, it seems to me that private institutions are much better in conducting and directing important research Evaluation Report Word count Comments 283 The candidate has presented relevant arguments The main ideas are organized well and explained coherently Paragraphing of the essay is fine The range of vocabulary is adequate for the requirements of the task response Overall, the control of grammar and sentence structures is good with only a few errors made © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com Ticket Id: 141559 Thursday, April 13, 2017 Estimated Band Score Suggestions Helpful links 8.5 Pay a little more attention to grammatical accuracy Always proofread the task response after finishing it Keep up the good work! Writing Correction Service - to order a correction click here IELTS preparation e-books - download a free trial here Sample essays, letters and reports - click here Learn vocabulary from this link http://www.scribd.com/doc/244244/Check-yourVocabulary-for-IELTS www.ielts-blog.com Note Please make sure to go over the detailed comments we marked for you in balloons on the right side of your task text If you can't see the balloons, please change your Word settings as follows: Click View -> Print Layout in the main menu Click View->Markup in the main menu © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com Ticket Id: 141559 Thursday, April 13, 2017 You should now see comments appearing in balloons on the right side: © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com ... to order a correction click here IELTS preparation e-books - download a free trial here Sample essays, letters and reports - click here Learn vocabulary from this link http://www.scribd.com/doc/244244/Check-yourVocabulary-for-IELTS