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Ticket Id: 141774 Thursday, April 13, 2017 The development of technology has influenced the ways people interact with each other What are the main changes in the types of interactions people have? Do you think this is positive or negative? It is undoubted that in recent decades technology has revolutionized , leading to several changes in the ways people use to communicate with others In my opinion, these changes are both advantageous and disadvantageous It is apparent that technology has digitally altered the traditional interpersonal communication methods For example, instead of hanging out with friends and relatives at weekends, individuals are likely to utilize some social network platforms such as Facebook and Google Plus to keep in touch with their loved one These people post pictures, update their status and commend in their friends’ posts pretending that they still interact with these people Besides, thanks to the development of advanced technology, we now can harness devices to make phone calls or even video calls regardless of the distance Because of this, some outdated communicating methods like writing letters are likely to be forgotten as it wastes a significant amount of time I am of the opinion that the changes mentioned above could be both positive and negative On the one hand, people now can easily keep in contact with their loved ones who stay far from them For instance, an overseas student can make video calls to his parents at home, this deters him from homesickness and may bring him courage to keep learning in university On other hand, too depending on modern technology can be harmful in terms of damaging real relationships If people keep being online and commending on others’ posts rather than having a real conversation, the relationships between human beings may be certainly lost In conclusion, the improvement of technological devices and machines bring a majority of changes in the ways we interact with others, and it seems to me that these alterations have both up and down sides Evaluation Report Word count Comments 292 All the parts of the task have been covered The ideas are presented coherently Paragraphing of the essay is fine Even though there are many errors in word choice, grammar and sentence structures, they don’t make the meaning much harder to understand at most places However, some parts can be written in a better way © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com Ticket Id: 141774 Thursday, April 13, 2017 Overall, the essay needs further improvement Estimated Band Score Suggestions Helpful links 6.0 or 6.5 Revise grammar Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words Avoid writing more than 280 words This will help in saving time and reducing mistakes Always proofread the task response after finishing it Keep practicing to improve your performance Writing Correction Service - to order a correction click here IELTS preparation e-books - download a free trial here Sample essays, letters and reports - click here Learn vocabulary from this link http://www.scribd.com/doc/244244/Check-yourVocabulary-for-IELTS www.ielts-blog.com Note Please make sure to go over the detailed comments we marked for you in balloons on the right side of your task text If you can't see the balloons, please change your Word settings as follows: Click View -> Print Layout in the main menu Click View->Markup in the main menu © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com Ticket Id: 141774 Thursday, April 13, 2017 You should now see comments appearing in balloons on the right side: © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com ...Ticket Id: 141774 Thursday, April 13, 2017 Overall, the essay needs further improvement Estimated Band Score Suggestions Helpful links 6.0 or 6.5 Revise... to order a correction click here IELTS preparation e-books - download a free trial here Sample essays, letters and reports - click here Learn vocabulary from this link http://www.scribd.com/doc/244244/Check-yourVocabulary-for-IELTS

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