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Ticket Id: 142235 Thursday, April 13, 2017 More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, cars and other items What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend? It is true that there is an increasing number of people purchasing luxurious products of wellknown brands While this phenomenon can be caused by several reasons, I personally believe it would bring more harm than good Admittedly, more people buying expensive possessions may be resulted from a handful of reasons Firstly, possessing expensive goods could be considered as a way of showing how rich and fashionable an individual is For example, affluent students usually drive pricy brand cars such as Mercedes and Ferrari to school, this may make them outstanding and attractive to others people can feel more confident about themselves Secondly, some luxurious brands are often regarded of high quality, this encourages those who have good financial conditions to keep buying these companies’ items It is apparent that instead of purchasing a product used in several months, people tend to spend a little more money to possess prolonged one However, I am of the opinion that buying expensive items can be detrimental To begin with, it is a waste of money because consumers can purchase affordable items with similar functions at a much lower price For instance, instead of buying an IPhone which costs over 300 dollar, consumers can pay approximately 100 dollar for a Samsung mobile phone which has the same quality and functions In addition, rich buyers who own various luxurious possessions are often in danger of being robbed Some bad guys often look for women and children who carry costly items to rob, and then they can sell them to earn money In conclusion, purchasing costly clothes, cars and other items from famous brands could be caused by a few reasons and it is my opinion that this phenomenon is negative Evaluation Report Word count Comments 285 The requirements of the task have been met; relevant examples are included to corroborate the viewpoint Paragraphing is skillfully managed Information and ideas are logically sequenced However, ambiguous structure could be found in writing The range of vocabulary is adequate only, and there is a lot of scope for improvement in word choice and vocabulary A wide range of structures is used as well However, scope for improvement is still seen in grammar, punctuation, and structures © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com Ticket Id: 142235 Thursday, April 13, 2017 Estimated Band Score Suggestions Helpful links 8.0 Revise grammar Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words as well as formation of words and structures Write unambiguous structures that have clarity Always proofread the task response after finishing it Keep practicing to improve your performance Writing Correction Service - to order a correction click here IELTS preparation e-books - download a free trial here Sample essays, letters and reports - click here Learn vocabulary from this link http://www.scribd.com/doc/244244/Check-yourVocabulary-for-IELTS www.ielts-blog.com Note Please make sure to go over the detailed comments we marked for you in balloons on the right side of your task text If you can't see the balloons, please change your Word settings as follows: Click View -> Print Layout in the main menu Click View->Markup in the main menu © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com Ticket Id: 142235 Thursday, April 13, 2017 You should now see comments appearing in balloons on the right side: © IELTS-Blog.com - All Rights Reserved ● Web: http://www.ielts-blog.com ... to order a correction click here IELTS preparation e-books - download a free trial here Sample essays, letters and reports - click here Learn vocabulary from this link http://www.scribd.com/doc/244244/Check-yourVocabulary-for-IELTS