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Overall band score 8.5 8+9+9+9 See below C&C LR GRA Model answer WRITING TASK You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic: Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes To what extent you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words Original answer It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally questionable at best The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire Overall band score 8.5 8+9+9+9 TR – Task Response nb – GRA and LR errors have not been corrected Band score Good answer, but your position could be more precisely defined See my comments for details, but you showed that some types of attire show a person’s culture and character, although most don’t So, I think you missed the opportunity to present a more convincing argument The ideas are relevant, extended and there are no contradictions Advice On Brainstorming For Task As you’re planning and writing your answer, remember to constantly ask yourself if you’re answering the question Check back to the question a few times as you think of ideas to make sure they're directly relevant Make sure your introduction directly addresses the question Make sure your ideas address all parts of the question If the question asks for solutions, in the plural, you must suggest at least Make sure your main ideas, as stated in the first sentence of the main body paragraphs, are directly relevant to the question Make sure your supporting ideas, which follow the main ideas in the main body paragraphs, directly support the main idea Be especially careful if you’ve answered similar question before, as there will always be important differences Make sure your conclusion directly answers the question, that it is consistent with the ideas in the main bodies, and that it does not contradict the introduction It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality [a] On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices [b] As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters [c][d] However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally questionable at best[e] The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles[f] People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone.[g] This is coupled with the fact that an individual's character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances [h] In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire.[i] C&C - Cohesion and Coherence nb GRA and LR errors have not been corrected Band score Excellent cohesion and coherence throughout, with no errors The sentences have a natural flow characteristic of high band score answers Paragraphing for Task I recommend you write paragraphs as follows: Write an introduction, that explains what the question is After reading the introduction, the reader should have a good idea what the essay is about, and what your position (opinion) is It should be possible to write an introduction in under 50 words It is not necessary to write a long background statement Write main body paragraphs This should allow you to expand on the ideas sufficiently to persuade the examiner that you’ve fully supported the main ideas If you write main bodies, it is more difficult to expand and support them sufficiently to get a high score If it’s a two-part question, answer the questions in the order they’re given and write one paragraph per question The main body paragraphs should be 100-120 words, and each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and or more supporting ideas which support the topic sentence with reasons, evidence, and examples Do not waste time with lots of background information The topic sentences should directly address the question The conclusion should be consistent with the introduction and the main ideas, and it should not introduce new ideas It should directly answer the question Do not leave the examiner in any doubt about whether you’ve answered the question If you write a third paragraph in a discuss both sides question to clarify your position, make sure to give a good reason to reject one of the sides If you just restated the original ideas about one side, the examiner may decide you have covered one side more than the other It is also ok to write a third body paragraph in a to what extent question if you have main ideas which both agree and disagree with the proposition Avoid short paragraphs, with under 70 words, as it may be difficult to show a clear central topic in a short paragraph It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices [j] As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree[k], for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors[l], it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters [m] However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally questionable at best[n] The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances [o] In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire.[p] LR- - Lexical resource nb Some GRA errors have not been corrected Band score Vocabulary is used accurately with sufficient flexibility to show precise meaning, with a wide variety of vocabulary, used accurately and with a high level of control It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally questionable at best The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization [q]of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire GRA – Grammatical range and accuracy nb Some LR errors have not been corrected Band score Grammar is used accurately with a wide variety of structures, which should be good for a band score Punctuation is used correctly throughout Appropriate structures are used throughout It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally questionable at best The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire