[Ngay 22] Should students wear uniforms [Huyen Nguyen - marked][Ngay 22] Should students wear uniforms [Huyen Nguyen - marked][Ngay 22] Should students wear uniforms [Huyen Nguyen - marked]
In about 140 words, discuss the question: “should students wear uniforms?” Essay: (Tự đọc đánh giá trước xem tiếp em) In my point of view, I completely agree that students should wear uniforms at school for some following reasons First and foremost, school uniforms keep students focusing on their education not their clothes Instead of wasting time on choosing what to wear on the next day, they can spend time on learning and many physical activities Another reason is that school uniforms save their parents’s money Without school uniforms policies, parents may feel pressure to compete with other families by purchasing fashionable clothes for their children Last but not least, it’s a known fact that students who wear uniforms perform better academically In conclusion, I totally support the idea that students should wear uniforms at school (116 words) Chú ý: Đây làm MẪU MỰC việc nối ý với liên kết câu ý Các em ý nhận xét anh cho bạn phần "Organization" học tập kỹ bạn Huyền nhé! Chữa: *Chú thích: Chữ đỏ: Anhuniforms viết vào at + In From my point of view, I completely agree that students should wear school for some following reasons (just about perfect!) Chữ vàng: Bỏ Nhận xét: Không nhầm hai cụm "In my view" "From my point of view" em Và anh thích cách em thể quan điểm mạnh mẽ với cụm từ " I completely agree that" nhé! Các bạn khác học cách dùng cụm từ giống bạn Huyền! + First and foremost, school uniforms keep students focusing focused on their education not their clothes Instead of wasting time on choosing what to wear on the next day, they can spend time on learning and their assignments or many physical activities Nhận xét: Ý em phát triển tốt Câu văn rõ ràng mạch lạc xúc tích + Another reason is that school uniforms save their parents’s money Without school uniforms policies, parents may feel pressure feel that they are under pressure to compete with other families by purchasing fashionable clothes for their children Nhận xét: Ý em phát triển tốt Em không cần linking devices mà tạo liên kết cho hai câu cách lặp lại keyword "uniform" Anh đánh giá cao việc + Last but not least, it’s a known fact that students who wear uniforms perform better academically Nhận xét: Rất tiếc ý em không phát triển hay mở rộng Em "chém" ví dụ đằng sau để support câu trên, "According to a recent study conducted in Havard University, students in schools where uniforms are mandatory grade 10% higher than those in schools with no dress code" + In conclusion, I totally support the idea that students should wear uniforms at school (perfect!) Nhận xét chung: + Nội dung: Hai ý đầu em phát triển hay, tiếc ý thứ ba em mang tính chất nêu Nếu lúc bí supporting idea, em chém research/study Độ dài không đạt (0.4 - 0.1 (lenght) = 0.3) + Bố cục/ liên kết: Rất tốt! Em xứng đáng điểm tuyện đối phần (0.5) + Từ vựng, ngữ pháp: Khá tốt Chỉ có số lỗi từ vựng ngữ pháp nhỏ em (0.4) Điểm: 1.2/1.5 Chúc Huyền Nguyễn nỗ lực trình chạy nước rút tới :) Anh có niềm tin em 1.5 điểm luận ;) ... University, students in schools where uniforms are mandatory grade 10% higher than those in schools with no dress code" + In conclusion, I totally support the idea that students should wear uniforms. .. lại keyword "uniform" Anh đánh giá cao việc + Last but not least, it’s a known fact that students who wear uniforms perform better academically Nhận xét: Rất tiếc ý em không phát triển hay mở rộng... tốt Câu văn rõ ràng mạch lạc xúc tích + Another reason is that school uniforms save their parents’s money Without school uniforms policies, parents may feel pressure feel that they are under