2. STRUCTURE ANDWRITING STYLE
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Do your ideas andwriting flow?
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Are there smooth transitions from sen-
tence to sentence, paragraph to para-
graph, and from page to page?
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Is your analysis easy to follow and
understand?
3. VOCABULARY AND TONE
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Is your tone professional?
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Is the writing persuasive and com-
pelling?
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Are there any unnecessary words, sen-
tences, paragraphs, or pages that need
to be omitted or rewritten?
4. SEQUENCING
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Are the paragraphs and sections of
your paper in the right order?
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Are there places where information
should be changed and shifted?
5. MEANING AND CONTENT
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What is the overall effect or lasting
impression of your work?
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What do you want the reader to take
away after reading your paper?
Steps toward Revision
After you have gone through this initial check-
list, it becomes much easier to see which parts
of your paper you have targeted and what
areas, specific pages, paragraphs, sentences, or
words really need work. The first and most
important thing that you want to do is to
arrange all your pages one after the other, so
that they make sense. If you need to cross out
some material, go ahead and draw great big
“X’s” through any pages, paragraphs, sen-
tences, and words that impede or interrupt the
logical flow of your ideas. You next step is even
easier. Use connecting and transitional phrases
and words that you have learned to make sure
that each paragraph is linked logically to the
one above it and the one below it. If you have
trouble connecting sentences or paragraphs,
reword them slightly and see if that helps. As
far as vocabulary and tone are concerned, use
a red pen and take out or circle any conversa-
tional, slang, or colloquial words. If you need
help thinking of more formal ways to express
yourself, consult a thesaurus or synonym dic-
tionary.
The next step, sequencing, is one of the
most fun parts to correct in your paper. If you
have printed out a draft of your paper, take out
a pair of scissors. If a paragraph seems out of
place, simply cut it out and tape it where it
belongs. In fact, another good way to visualize
your paper that helps in sequencing is to tape
your pages up against the wall. Stare at them in
sequence. Do they belong in that order? If they
don’t, take a page, lift it off the wall and tape it
next to another page. If you have your draft on
a computer and prefer to work on the screen,
simply cut and paste your paragraphs wherev-
er you like.
Finally, in regard to meaning and con-
tent, pay careful attention to the end of your
paper and your conclusion. Now that you have
done all this work and are thoroughly knowl-
edgeable about your topic, writing your con-
clusion should be much easier. Your conclu-
sion, like your introduction—which included
your thesis statement—is the second most
important part of your paper. After all, your
conclusion is the last thing your reader will
see. What final impression do you want your
readers to have about your work and subject
matter? Take this time as you revise to rewrite
your conclusion. Make it perfect and look over
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each word. Is your conclusion as powerful as it
could be?
Toward a Final Revision
The beauty of revising is that you already have
your material in front of you. You are no
longer writing from scratch, you are simply
refining and polishing. Take your time. Sit
back and read your paper from beginning to
end. Go through your checklist and allow
yourself to take the time to perfect your paper.
You can break your paper into manageable
pieces during this revision process. Look at
each paragraph and study each page. While
this task may seem time consuming and need-
lessly slow at first, remember that revising, like
writing, is a process. The more time you take
revising your thoughts, the less you will have
to edit. By thinking of the revision process as a
puzzle you are completing, you will enjoy the
challenge of putting all the final pieces into
place.
The Final Draft
When you have gone through all the steps on
the checklist and you have tinkered with all the
words, sentences, paragraphs, and pages by
changing, shifting, or rewriting them, put your
paper away in a drawer. If you can leave it for
a day or so, that’s ideal. If you are working
under a tight deadline, then just put your
paper away for a few hours. This is important.
It allows you to take some time and gain some
distance so that when you come back to your
paper to read the final draft, you can look at it
critically and with the expertise of an
informed but impartial observer. If you read
your final draft too soon after reassembling it,
you may not have adequate perspective to view
your work as a whole. After a couple of hours
or a day has passed, look at your new final
draft. Print it out and make any necessary
changes, but make sure that you keep your old
draft or drafts as well. You might need to refer
to them later. It’s always good to look at those
old drafts to see just how far you’ve come!
Summary
Revising a large work that has taken a while to
write can seem like a daunting and unpleasant
task. How do you revise a paper that has taken
so many weeks to write? Break the process
down into manageable pieces, work slowly and
systematically, and have fun. If you work on
your paper in sections, one piece at a time,
your final draft will emerge all by itself before
your very eyes.
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. STRUCTURE AND WRITING STYLE
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Do your ideas and writing flow?
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Are there smooth transitions from sen-
tence to sentence, paragraph to para-
graph, and from. your analysis easy to follow and
understand?
3. VOCABULARY AND TONE
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Is your tone professional?
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Is the writing persuasive and com-
pelling?
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Are there