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Thesis: Parents are not always the best teachers Paragraph 1, Sentence 2 develop close emotional ties Paragraph 1, Sentence 3 «share their interests
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Parents may be too close to their children emotionally
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~ For example, they may limit a child’s freedom in the name of safety Paragraph 3: Main idea
Another problem is that parents sometimes expect their children’s interests to be similar to their own
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— If the parents love science, they may try to force their child to love science too ~ If the parents enjoy sports, they may expect their child to participate on differ-
ent teams
Paragraph 4: Main idea
Finally, although parents want to pass on their values to their children, values can change
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— A student who has friends of different races at school may find that his parents have narrower views
— A student who loves computers may find that her parents don’t understand or value the digital revolution
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Another ‘Adds information
But Shows contrast
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‘Simple sentence They share their interests with
them
‘A teacher may organize an educational trip to a big city, bur a parent may think this
trip is too dangerous
‘Complex sentence | Paagraph3 | If the parents love science, they may try to force their child to love science too
‘A student who has friends of different races at school may find that his parents have narrower views ‘Compound sentence Adjective clause
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Essay Topic 13
Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants, Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Although many people prefer to eat at restaurants because it is
‘hes tatement [easier than cooking at home, |/prefer t prepare food at home: | believe
it is much cheaper and healthier to eat at home, and ít can be more convenient, too
‘While eating in restaurants is fast, the money you spend can add up ‘When | have dinner at a restaurant, the bill is usually $25 or more | can buy a lot of groceries with that much money Even lunch at a food stand can easily cost seven or eight dollars That's enough to feed a whole family at home
Eating at home is better for you, too Meals at restaurants are often high in fat and calories When you cook at home, however, you can control what you eat You can cook with low-fat and low-calorie ingredi- ents Restaurants also often serve big plates of food You may eat a big plate of food at a restaurant because you paid for it, while at home you
‘can control your portion size You can serve yourself as litle as you want,
It may seem more convenient to eat at a restaurant because you
don't have to shop, cook, or clean up All you do is eat Cooking at
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People often choose to eat at restaurants because it seems more
convenient | find, however, that cooking at home is actually easier,
and it is cheaper and healthier as well Content Supporting details FLUENCY AND COHESION ‘Transition words Grammar and Spelling Sentence variety
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The task asks the writer to state a preference In the first paragraph, the writer clearly states a preference
Task: State a preference
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Paragraph 1, Sentence 2 cheaper Paragraph 1, Sentence 2 healthier
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Paragraph 2: Main idea
While eating in restaurants is fast, the money you spend can add up Supporting details
— When I have dinner at a restaurant, the bill is usually $25 or more — Even lunch at a food stand can easily cost seven or eight dollars Paragraph 3: Main idea
Eating at home is better for you, too Supporting details
— When you cook at home, however, you can control what you eat — .at home you can control your portion size
Paragraph 4: Main idea
‘Cooking at home, however, can actually be more convenient Supporting details
— There are a lot of simple meals that dont take long to prepare
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however Shows contrast
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‘When I have dinner at a restaurant, the bill is usually
$25 or more
‘Adjective clause
There are a lot of simple meals that don’t take long, to prepare
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In addition, when you eat at home, you don't have to drive to the restaurant, look for a parking space, wait for a table, and wait for service
Essay Topic 16
Ít has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neigh-
borhood Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and
details to support your answer
| can see both advantages and disadvar
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new restaurant would just add to the problem Most restaurant cus-
tomers would arrive by car and crowd our streets even more In addi-
tion, they would occupy parking spaces and make it even harder for
residents to find places to park near their homes
im also concerned about the type of patrons that a new restaurant would bring into our neighborhood If the restaurant serves drinks and
has dancing, there could be problems The restaurant would stay open late and people leaving the restaurant might be drunk They could be
Noisy, too That is not the kind of thing | want to see in my neighborhood Finally, there are other types of businesses that we need in our
neighborhood more We already have a restaurant and a couple of
coffee shops We don't have a bookstore or pharmacy, however, and we have only one small grocery store | would prefer to see one of these businesses established here rather than another restaurant Any ‘one of them would be more useful to the residents and would maintain
the quiet atmosphere of our streets
A new restaurant could disrupt the quiet lifestyle of our neighbor- hood It might bring jobs, but it would also bring traffic and noise More-
cover, it would use space that might be better used for another type of
business This is why | would oppose a plan for a new restaurant Content Revision Checklist CONTENT | Thesis Statement Main ideas Supporting details, FLUENCY AND COHESION ‘Transition words Grammar and Spelling Sentence variety
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‘The task asks the writer to support or oppose a plan In the first paragraph, the writer clearly states opposition to the plan
‘Task: Support or oppose plan
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‘The first paragraph mentions three topics that support the thesis, These will become the main ideas of the paragraphs in the body of the essay
Thesis: I believe, however, that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages
Paragraph 1, Sentence 3 « «« bring more traffic problems to the area Paragraph 1, Sentence 4 «attract undesirable people
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Traffic congestion is already a problem in our neighborhood and a new restaurant would just add to the problem
Supporting details
— Most restaurant customers would arrive by car and crowd our streets even more
— In addition, they would occupy parking spaces and make it even harder for resi- dents to find places to park near their homes
Paragraph 3: Main idea
T'm also concerned about the type of patrons a new restaurant would bring into our neighborhood
Supporting details
— The restaurant would stay open late and people leaving the restaurant might be drunk
— They could be noisy, too Paragraph 4: Main idea
Finally, there are other types of businesses that we need in our neighborhood more Supporting details
— We already have a restaurant and a couple of coffee shops
— We dont have a bookstore or pharmacy, however, and we have only one small grocery store Fluency and Cohesion Revision Checklist CONTENT Thesis Statement ‘Main ideas Supporting details FLUENCY AND COHESION VW | Transition words Grammar and Spelling Sentence variety
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In addition Paragraphs 1, 2 Adds information
‘Most of all ‘Adds information
also f ~| Adds information
Finally Paragraph 4 Shows order of ideas
but Paragraph 5 | Showscontrast
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Complex sentence
If the restaurant serves drinks and has dancing, there could be problems
‘Simple sentence We already have a restaurant
and a couple of coffee shops
‘Compound sentence
Te might bring jobs, but it would also bring traffic
and noise
Essay Topic 17
Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher Others think that it is always better to have a teacher Which do you prefer? Use
specific reasons to develop your essay
Most people can learn to do something simple on their own with just a set of instructions However, to learn something more complex, it's
always best to have a teacher Teachers help you find the way that you
5 main ideas
aur awn ects pe eT TSA | Sal ahem
knowledge than you can usually get by yourself,
Teachers can help students learn in the way that is best for each student because teachers understand that different people have differ- ent leaming styles For example, some students learn better by dis- cussing a topic Others learn more by writing about it A teacher can
help you follow your learning style, while a book can give you only one
way of learning something
Teachers help you focus on what you are leaning They can help you keep from becoming distracted They can show you which are the ‘most important points in a lesson to understand If you have to study on your own, on the other hand, it might be difficult to keep your atten- tion on the material or know which points are most important
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Task: State a preference
Thesis: teachers provide you with a lot more support and knowledge than you can usually get by yourself Revision Checklist | CONTENT Thesis Statement | Main ideas Supporting details FLUENCY AND COHESION “Transition words Grammar and Spelling Sentence variety v CHECK FOR MAIN IDEAS
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Paragraph 1, Sentence 3 help you find the way that you learn best Paragraph 1, Sentence 4 «help you stay focused
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‘The paragraphs have topic sentences and supporting details In the body of the essay, the topic sentences of the paragraphs match the topics introduced in the first
paragraph
Paragraph 2: Main idea
‘Teachers can help students learn in the way that is best for each student because teachers understand that different people have different learning styles
Supporting details
— For example, some students learn better by discussing a topic = Others learn more by writing about it
~ A teacher can help you follow your learning style, while a book can give you only one way of learning something
Paragraph 3: Main idea
Teachers help you focus on what you are learning Supporting details
~ They can help you keep from becoming distracted
= They can show you which are the most important points in a lesson to understand — Ifyou have to study on your own, on the other hand, it might be difficult to keep