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35. The revision to sentences 11 and 12 (reprinted below) that would most improve the essay is (11) For example, even kindergarteners could come up with a list of rules for their classroom. (12) Including no pushing or name calling, ask before you take something, put things away, and say please and thank you. a. place sentence 12 before sentence 11. b. connect the sentences with the word and. c. connect the sentences with a comma. d. delete sentence 12. e. eliminate unnecessary wordiness from both sentences. 36. In the context of the essay, which of the following is the most effective combination of sentences 9 and 10 (reprinted below)? (9) In fact, schools should allow students to participate in the creation of many different rules. (10) As well as in the punishment for the viola- tion of these rules, too; even in elementary school. a. In fact, schools should allow students to participate in the creation of many different rules, as well as in their punishments for the viola- tion of these rules. Even in elementary school. b. As a matter of fact, schools should allow students to participate in creating many different rules and punishing them for breaking those rules, likewise even in elementary school. c. Because of this fact, schools, even elementary, should allow students to participate in making and breaking rules. d. In fact, administrators should allow students to participate in creating rules and determining punishments for breaking those rules— even at the elementary level. e. Rules and the punishments for breaking them should be determined by participation of students in schools, even elementary ones. 37. Which of the following is the most logical order of sentences within paragraph 2? a. 5, 6, 7, 8 b. 5, 7, 6, 8 c. 5, 6, 8, 7 d. 6, 7, 8, 5 e. 8, 7, 6, 5 38. The best paragraph revision to this essay would be which of the following? a. Combine paragraphs 1 and 2. b. Start a third paragraph with sentence 6. c. Start a third paragraph with sentence 9. d. Start a third paragraph with sentence 13. e. No change to existing paragraph structure is necessary. 39. Which of the following revisions to sentence 14 would most improve the essay? a. Delete it. b. Move it to the end of the first paragraph. c. Move it to the beginning of the second paragraph. d. Change Furthermore to In contrast. e. Combine sentences 13 and 14. 40. The revision that would make the essay most persuasive would be to a. provide several specific examples to support claims in the argument. b. discuss opposing views. c. describe the author’s personal experience with authority. d. restate the thesis at the end of the passage. e. make the overall tone and style more formal. –THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 227 5658 SAT2006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 227  Answers 1. c. The pronoun whom is followed by a verb, indicating that it is acting as a subject. Whom should therefore be in the subjective case, who. All other underlined portions are correct. 2. a. The verb refer does not agree with its subject, term, which is singular. The verb should therefore also be singular: refers. All other underlined portions are correct. 3. e. There are no errors in this sentence. 4. d. The verb has . . . been is in the wrong tense. The simple present tense is is required here. 5. a. This is an error in prepositional idiom. The correct phrase is backlash against. 6. e. There are no errors in this sentence. 7. d. The tenses shift from the present (posits, alters) to the past (was). To be consistent and logical, all verbs should be in the present (is being observed). 8. a. Mathematical is an adjective, but it is modify- ing a verb; thus, it should be in the adjective form, mathematically. 9. c. This sentence lacks parallel structure. Be practicing is not in the same grammatical form as the infinitive to be. To be correct, be practicing needs to be changed to practice (with an understood to). 10. b. This sentence confuses raise with the correct word, rise.To raise is to lift something up or elevate; it is a transitive verb that takes an object. To rise is to move up; it is an intransi- tive verb and the word needed in this sentence. 11. e. There are no errors in this sentence. 12. b. This sentence contains an improper shift in pronoun person. The correct pronoun is they, not you . 13. c. This is an error in word choice. Then should be the comparative than. 14. b. The singular his or her does not agree with its plural indefinite pronoun antecedent, Many. To correct this error, his or her should be replaced with their. 15. c. This sentence is a run-on with a comma splice. The best way to correct this error is by replacing the comma with a semicolon. 16. e. There are no errors in this sentence. 17. d. There are actually two errors here: pronoun- antecedent agreement and subject-verb agreement. The prepositional phrase for the body copy of books, magazines, and newspapers may mislead you to think that books, magazines, and newspapers are the subject. How- ever, the subject is family, which is singular. Thus, the pronoun should be it and the verb is: the Roman family of fonts is almost exclusively used for the body copy of books, magazines, and newspapers because it is both familiar to readers and highly legible. 18. d. The modifier sophisticate is in the wrong form. It should be the adjective sophisticated. 19. c. The context should make it clear that the verb use should be in the past tense: Chinese printers used moveable block prints and type made of clay as early as 1040. 20. b. Choice a incorrectly uses the semicolon and does not clearly indicate what is significantly more—the percentage of Americans using alternative medicines or the frequency with which they use alternative medicines. Choice b corrects the semicolon error and correctly identifies exactly what the increase is: an increase in numbers. Choice c merely states that the increase is over the decade, which is incorrect. Choice d is wordy. Choice e is a run-on sentence, is wordy, and has awkward sentence structure. –THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 228 5658 SAT2006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 228 21. d. Choice d is the most concise version of this sentence. Choice a uses the passive voice (can be replaced by microchips). Choice b is wordy and still retains the passive voice. Choice c is wordy and awkward and a run-on sentence; by adding you, e creates an improper shift in pronoun person. 22. b. This is the most concise version and the one that best expresses the relationship between the clauses. The use of also in choice a expresses addition when the relationship is really one of simultaneity. Choice c has a superfluous comma after while and uses a wordy that clause. Choice d is wordy. Choice e makes the same error as a and uses the vague phrase find things. 23. e. Choices a, b, and c are wordy. The yet in choice d does not express the right relationship between the clauses. 24. b. The main issue here is proper subordination/coordination. Although in choice a does not express the right kind of contrast; black holes do one thing while white holes do another—they exist simultaneously. Choice c makes the same mistake with likewise, which expresses similarity. Choice d uses the wrong subordinator and is wordy. Choice e omits the subordinating or coordi- nating word and is a run-on sentence. 25. e. The original item has a misplaced modifier. The sentence reads as if more than 12 million Americans are formally known as sleep apnea. Choice b uses the ungrammatical phrase being known as. Choice c is a fragment. Choice d has a vague pronoun reference; it is not clear to what exactly it refers. 26. a. This is the most clear and concise version. Choices b, c, and e are wordy. Choice d is a fragment and uses the preposition of where from is required. 27. a. This is the most clear and concise version. Choice b is wordy, using the passive construction by scientists. Choice c uses the wordy and awkward (even illogical) construction with the tail of a rat, grafted it. Choice d is a run-on and uses the wrong tense (it should be the simple past tense grafted, not had grafted). Choice e is a run-on and uses the wrong conjunctive adverb: Thus does not express the relationship between the clauses. It also makes tense mistake in d and uses a passive construction. 28. c. Choices a, b, and d have misplaced modifiers. Choice b also uses the ungrammatical phrase being seated. Choice e is grammatically correct but wordier than c, which is more direct and logical in its structure. 29. b. Coordination/subordination, parallel structure, and wordiness are the main issues here. Choice a uses the illogical subordinating conjunction whereas and lacks parallel structure—the elements of the second Bloody Sunday (date, event, place) are not in the same order or form as the first. Choice c uses an incorrect conjunction, is wordy because it uses the passive voice, and is not parallel. Choice d incorrectly uses in contrast instead of a word that expresses addition and uses the passive voice. Choice e expresses a logical relationship between the clause but is wordy and uses the passive voice. 30. d. The main error here is the unclear pronoun reference in they, which can refer to either the chemicals or the cancerous cells. Only choice d clarifies this by stating because the chemicals are unable to distinguish. Choice a is a run-on sentence. Choice b is missing a noun or pronoun after because. Choices c and e are illogical. 31. d. Only choice d corrects the faulty comparison: Human beings are taller and stronger than they were 200 years ago, not taller and stronger than 200 years ago. Choice b has an apostro- phe error in being’s. Choices c and e are fragments. –THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 229 5658 SAT2006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 229 32. b. The original item (choice a) is a run-on sentence. Choice b correctly replaces the comma with a semicolon. Choice c also replaces the comma with a semicolon but awkwardly uses the passive voice (what is popularly believed). Choice d is wordy, and e correctly uses a semicolon but mistakenly omits the comma after the introductory phrase contrary to popular belief. 33. e. The original is very wordy and is best divided into at least two sentences. Choice a divides the sentence into three, but the second is a fragment, and it is overall still wordy. Choice b is more concise but misuses the semicolon. Choice c is full of awkward and ungrammatical construc- tions and is a run-on. Choice d has similar problems and has unnecessary repetition. 34. d. The original sentence is a run-on. Choice a retains the run-on and uses because of this,a transition that does not express the right relationship between the two clauses. It is not because students are more responsible and sensible that they will more likely adhere to the dress code. The relationship between the two clauses is one of addition; the author is providing another example to support his or her point. Choice b commits the same errors as choice a. Choice c corrects the run-on but doesn’t provide a transition, making it diffi- cult to determine what the relationship is between the two clauses. Choice e corrects the run-on by separating the clauses into two sentences, but starts the second sentence with Obviously, which is not the best word choice. 35. c. Sentence 12 provides specific examples of the rules that kindergarteners could come up with, and it could logically be attached to sentence 11. As it is, sentence 12 is a fragment. Switching the sentence order (choice a) would be illogical, as would connecting them with and (choice b). Deleting sentence 12 (choice d) would weaken the paragraph by removing specific examples. Neither sentence is wordy, so choice e is incorrect. 36. d. This version corrects several problems with sentences 9 and 10. First, it changes schools to administrators, who are the ones who would allow student participation. Second, it has effective parallel structure with creating rules and determining punishments. It uses the dash to effectively emphasize even at the elementary level, a phrase set off incorrectly by a semicolon in the original version (thus creating a fragment). Choice a essentially repeats the errors in the original. Choice b incorrectly adds likewise to the sentence and illogically states that schools should allow students to participate in punishing themselves (rather than in determining punishments). Choice c seems concise and uses parallel structure, but it uses a wordy phrase because of this fact. Choice e uses the passive voice. 37. c. Sentence 8 logically follows 6. Because students have a role in creating the dress code, they will be more likely to adhere to it—as a result, there will be less disciplinary action. Sentence 7 then adds another benefit of student participation. 38. c. Sentence 9 shifts from the focus on student participation in creating the dress code to student participation in rule-making in general. Because paragraph 2 discusses to different ideas, it should be divided, and this is the most effective place to do so. 39. a. Sentence 14 does what a conclusion should not do: It introduces a new topic instead of creating a sense of closure. The best revision would therefore be to delete it. 40. a. One of the weaknesses of the essay is that it does not provide any specific examples to support its claims. Providing evidence is usually the most effective way to persuade readers to accept a point of view. Choices b, c, and d would be helpful but have less impact than providing examples. Choice e would probably make little difference as the passage is not overly informal. –THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 230 5658 SAT2006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 230  Part 4: The Essay Since you will only have 25 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay on the SAT, it is important to prepare in advance by learning what type of prompt to expect, how your writing will be scored, and how to manage your time while following the five-step writing process. Understanding the Prompts: Responding to Quotes One essay question type involves responding to a statement or quotation, as seen below: Creativity is allowing oneself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep. —Scott Adams Assignment: What is your opinion on the relationship between mistakes and creativity? In an essay, support your opinion using an example or examples from literature, the arts, history, current events, politics, science and technology, or personal experience or observation. When faced with a quotation, you should determine its main point before proceeding. What is the opinion or statement that the quo tation is making? You may want to quickly jot down your interpretation of the quote on your scrap paper. This will help you later as you brainstorm your response to the quote. For example, in response to the above quotation, you may jot down “Mistakes happen—byproduct of creativity. Making them work for you—that’s art.” Then, you will read the assignment for more details about how to move forward. Here, the task is to discuss the relationship between mistakes and creativity. If you do not take the time to consider the quote, you risk misunderstanding the assignment, and this will seriously detract from your score, since understanding the assignment is a key component of your score. Another type of prompt asks you to choose between two opposing ideas expressed in quotations, as seen below: Even if smog were a risk to human life, we must remember that life in nature, without technology, is wholesale death. —Ayn Rand If it keeps up, man will atrophy all his limbs but the push-button finger. —Frank Lloyd Wright Assignment: Consider the two contrasting state- ments above. Choose the quotation that most closely reflects your viewpoint. Write an essay explaining your choice. To support your view, use an example or examples from history, politics, science and technology, literature, the arts, current events, or your own personal experience and observation. Again, because this prompt involves responding to quotations, a critical first step is to be certain of what each speaker is trying to say. Once that is determined, you will choose the side you agree with more strongly. You will then write an essay in which you support your opinion. A student may interpret the first quotation as “Technology is critical to life” and the second as “Technology is harmful and undesirable.” Prov- ing the validity of one of these two opinions will be your task in the essay. –THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 231 5658 SAT2006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 231 Understanding the Prompts: Completing a Statement or Idea The other type of prompt you may confront will ask you to complete a sentence or idea, such as the one that follows: Many things happen in the course of a person’s life that change his or her future dramatically. One such event I have witnessed was . . . Assignment: Complete the sentence above with an appropriate phrase. Then write an essay supporting your completed statement. This type of prompt requires that you think of examples and situations that illustrate the statement. In an essay in response to this prompt, the readers will be looking for a clear, strongly supported account of an event that led to significant change. This prompt very easily lends itself to the use of personal experience. Or, you could answer using a historical event with which you are very familiar. No matter how you address the prompt, the point is not just to make claims or asser- tions, but also to back them up with evidence, as you will practice later in this section. Test Success Regardless of which type of prompt you face on test day, your basic plan to succeed is the same. You have to come up with a strong opinion or stance in regard to the prompt. If you are unsure in your stance, your writing will be weak and your score will suffer. How- ever, your opinion is not enough. Like a lawyer before a jury, you must convince your reader with evidence that your opinion is valid. This evidence consists of concrete examples, illustrations, and details. In this section, you will practice writing essays that offer concrete support for your opinions. The essay does not require specific knowledge of literature, history, or current events. The topics are broad enough so that you can use personal experience to support your opinion. However, while you can always rely on personal experience, and certainly many high-scoring essays do so, it is a good idea to brush up on some general areas you are familiar with before the test day. For example, you may have studied topics like discrimination and the civil rights movement that can be applied to many possible questions, so you might want to review these topics. It is important to remember that while the prompts are general, your essay needs to be specific. If you only address the prompt in general terms, without providing specific examples to support your position, you will not receive a high score. Scoring As the expert graders score your paper, they will be grading it holistically. This means that rather than using a point system that awards you a certain number of points for each component, they will be looking at your response as a whole and awarding it a score. How- ever, as they determine that overall score, the graders will be focusing on four areas: meaning (content), development (support), organization (flow of ideas), and language use or mechanics (grammar). Although a specific point value is not assigned for each component, these are the areas that will be assessed and considered when the grader arrives at a score. Scores range from a low of 1 (showing writing incompetence) to a maximum of 6 (demonstrating clear and consistent competence). The graders will focus on the strength of your argument. Are you con- vincing? Do your ideas make sense? Do you have insightful, supported comments on the topic? Do your ideas flow logically? In addition to looking for this content, the graders will be paying attention to your writing style. Is it grammatically fluent? Are you observing the standard rules of grammar, punctua- tion, and spelling? Is your vocabulary sufficient to adequately put forth your ideas? Is your essay interesting? A modified copy of the rubric follows: –THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 232 5658 SAT2006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 232 . describe the author’s personal experience with authority. d. restate the thesis at the end of the passage. e. make the overall tone and style more formal. THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 227 56 58 SAT2 006[05](fin).qx. sentences within paragraph 2? a. 5, 6, 7, 8 b. 5, 7, 6, 8 c. 5, 6, 8, 7 d. 6, 7, 8, 5 e. 8, 7, 6, 5 38. The best paragraph revision to this essay would be which of the following? a. Combine paragraphs. awkward sentence structure. THE SAT WRITING SECTION– 2 28 56 58 SAT2 006[05](fin).qx 11/21/05 6:45 PM Page 2 28 21. d. Choice d is the most concise version of this sentence. Choice a uses the passive voice

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