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Rewrite the following sentences, replacing euphemisms with precise words. 13. The political candidates had a frank exchange of views. 14. Dave enjoyed going out to eat with his friends, but his table manners were lacking in polish. 15. As children, the boys relied on the pugilistic arts to solve their disagreements. Rewrite the following sentences, replacing self-important language with precise, direct language. 16. The nimble dashing flow of water changed from a bluish hue to moving snow as it cascaded over the granite pillows below. 17. The book society sought celebrated wordsmiths to elevate its literary audience. PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 116 www.petersons.com Rewrite the following passages, eliminating overly emotional words and flowery language. 18. Reggie’s decision not to have a DJ for the party shows how stubborn and inept he is at planning social engagements. 19. The generous and giving nature of Tan was manifested by his gift to the university. 20. The sustaining values that parents convey to their progeny is created through the multitudinous experiences one has in a lifetime. Rewrite the following sentences, removing slang or jargon. Use precise, direct language. 21. The stockbroker told his client that the company’s earnings and P/E multiple indicated that the equity would increase in value. 22. The interaction of the pressure gradients was indicative of a coming rainstorm. CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 117 www.petersons.com Rewrite the following sentences, removing “deadwood” and redundancies. Use precise, direct language. 23. It is a fact that Sun is the fastest runner in the school. 24. Kristalle did not get the job that she wanted due to the fact that she did not turn in her application on time. 25. A great deal of time and money is spent on scientific projects that have uncertain benefits. 26. I find that to understand an assignment I often have to read it a couple of times and take notes. 27. The golden retriever ran around the side of the corner of the building to get the stray ball that was thrown by the girl. Rewrite the following passages, making them more succinct. 28. The tasks that are placed before American politicians change from time to time due to new priorities. PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 118 www.petersons.com 29. Mary worked hard to complete her reading, and then she worked on her term paper. 30. The sailors watched from the deck as the golden orb of the setting sun made its final appearance as it set behind the clouds. Rewrite the following passages by combining sentences. Make sure to use precise, concise language and do not alter the author’s meaning. 31. In the past, it was common to find social functions for the young centered on the family. Today, most social functions are associ- ated with school in some fashion. 32. Wonda, Carla, and Jaresa were in an argument. They were upset because each of them wanted to be the lead singer. CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 119 www.petersons.com Rewrite the following sentences, making them shorter without changing their meaning. Keep in mind that there is no one correct answer. 33. Since the United States was first created, political parties were developed so that people with essentially the same viewpoint had a means of expressing their thoughts as to how the govern- ment should be run. 34. A lunar eclipse occurs when a shadow caused by the earth blocking the light from the sun falls across the visible portion of the moon, but not all observers see the same thing because of their unique view of the moon. PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 120 www.petersons.com Rewrite the following sentence by using each of the openers identified by the letters (A), (B), and (C). You may substitute words, but do not change the author’s meaning. Keep in mind that there is no one correct answer. Note: Not all of these new beginnings are ones that you are likely to use in an SAT I essay because they may not be as concise or clear to the reader. But learning which ones work and which ones don’t in particular situations helps you with your revision process. 35. Moreover, the rights of the many must be limited in order to prevent individuals from a loss of their rights and freedoms. (A) Prepositional phrase: (B) Infinitive phrase: (C) Inverted order: CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 121 www.petersons.com Rewrite the following passage by using each of the sentence structures identified by the letters (A), (B), (C), and (D). Although it may not be possible to maintain all of the author’s original thoughts in each sentence structure, try to keep as much as possible. 36. The urban environment is one of the most complex on Earth. People too often focus only on the human elements, but many animals and plants thrive in the city. (A) Simple sentence: (B) Compound sentence: (C) Complex sentence: PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 122 www.petersons.com (D) Compound-complex sentence: The following sentences may have an error in capitalization, abbreviation, or punctuation. Identify the error and the means to correct the mistake. 37. The instructions for the test include the following: mark the correct answer in the proper oval and make sure to darken the entire oval. 38. 11 players can form a football team. 39. The colors of the American flag are red, white and blue. 40. Mark yelled at his brother, “Dad said, Don’t play in the junk- yard!” 41. There were eighty three volunteers who went to paint the building. 42. Juanita was talking to Rosa (a beautiful dancer) about the ballet auditions. 43. The team was devastated by its loss, however, the players recovered quickly. CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 123 www.petersons.com 44. The author was quoted as saying, “I believe that writers can sway public opinion—these people can be hard to convince.” 45. The “Bible” is the most widely owned book in the United States. 46. Many people mistakenly believe that San Francisco California is the state’s capital. 47. Hakeem said, “I feel that this is the best movie I’ve seen in a long time.” 48. The cars lights were being turned on as it grew dark. 49. The earthquake hit at rush hour; commuters still remember the shaking motion. 50. All of us sometimes forget to cross our ts. PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 124 www.petersons.com ANSWERS AND EXPLANATIONS CHECK YOUR WRITING SKILLS, PAGES 113–124 Check your answers against these suggested responses. Remember that except for the capitalization and punctuation sentences, there is no one correct way to rework a sentence. If you are still unsure about some of the ways to revise your writing, review the 10 rules again. Complete the additional exercises presented on page 128. 1. The streetlights brightened and dimmed as the storm interrupted the electricity. 2. The moviegoers complained about the people talking. 3. John missed only two questions on his history examination. 4. Our team overcame the opposing team’s large half-time lead and went on to win the game easily. 5. Kathy skied as fast as she could to avoid an avalanche. 6. The first frost of autumn energizes me. 7. Jamie and Ali concentrated on their game. 8. Surveys often use estimates to calculate certain statistics. 9. The poet’s image of a sunny day seemed to establish the overall mood of the poem very well. 10. The robin’s egg was nestled in its home of twigs. 11. Carla suddenly understood and was able to solve her problem. 12. When the supervisor told me that I was getting a raise, I was happy. 13. The political candidates disagreed. 14. Dave enjoyed going out to eat with his friends, but his table manners were poor. 15. As children, the boys solved their disagreements by fighting. 16. The river changed from blue to white as it cascaded over the rocks. 17. The literary society searched for well-known authors to interest its members. 18. Reggie’s decision not to have a DJ for the party shows how little experience he has in planning parties. 19. Tan’s generosity was evident in his gift to the university. 20. A lifetime of experiences creates lasting values that parents pass on to children. CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 125 www.petersons.com [...]... www.petersons.com 13 0 CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING CHECK OFF Before you continue on to Part II, • Can you summarize what you learned about writing effective prose? • Do you know which rules apply to areas of your own writing? • Do you know how you are going to work on those areas in your writing? Make a plan to practice writing and revising your own work every day between now and SAT I test... and precise words 13 1 www.petersons.com Part II Practicing Standard English for Writing In Chapters 6 through 9, you will learn • Basic information about the multiple-choice section on the SAT I • General test-taking strategies for the multiple-choice questions • The differences between the Identifying Sentence Errors, Improving Sentences, and Improving Paragraphs sections on the Writing test • Strategies... been omitted 12 7 www.petersons.com PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 45 The Bible is the most widely owned book in the United States Rule: Do not underline or place in quotation marks the titles of holy books such as the Koran or the Bible, or their parts 46 Many people mistakenly believe that San Francisco, California, is the state’s capital Rule: Use a comma to separate each part of a geographical... of test item • How to recognize 10 0 of the most common usage errors in standard written English You will also practice • Answering simulated test items for each type of multiple-choice question on the SAT I Writing test Chapter 6 ABOUT THE MULTIPLE-CHOICE SECTION Your goals for this chapter are to • Learn basic information about the multiple-choice section on the SAT I Writing test • Analyze the question... eliminate at least one answer choice Some of these tips work better with some types of multiple-choice questions on the SAT I Writing test than others • First, ignore answers that are absolutely wrong • Eliminate choices in which part of the answer is incorrect www.petersons.com 13 6 CHAPTER 6: ABOUT THE MULTIPLE-CHOICE SECTION • Check the key words in the question again • Reread remaining answers to discover... individuals from a loss of their rights and freedoms (C) Inverted order To prevent individuals from a loss of their rights and freedoms, the rights of the many must be limited 12 6 CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 36 (A) Simple sentence The complex urban environment has a thriving population of plants and animals (B) Compound sentence People focus on the human elements in the complex urban... to become familiar with the different types of multiple-choice question formats used on the SAT I Writing test The Writing test on the SAT I includes multiple-choice questions that assess your knowledge of standard written English This chapter provides basic information for the multiple-choice section on the Writing test, as well as suggestions for developing a strategy for attacking the questions Chapters... precise Essay 1 Essay 2 Didn’t find any examples of tired, overused expressions or slang? Great! That’s one area that you won’t have to worry about for the SAT I essay Be sure to keep up the good work Found a couple of worn-out expressions, some slang, or jargon? Recognize that this is one area that you will have to be careful about in your writing From now on, avoid using them in all your writing 12 9 www.petersons.com.. .PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 21 22 The forecast called for rain 23 Sun is the fastest runner in the school 24 Kristalle did not get the job that she wanted because she did not turn in her application on time 25 Significant time and money is spent on scientific projects that have uncertain benefits 26 To understand an assignment, I often have... and 9 can also help you with your own writing The grammar, usage, mechanics, and word choice decisions you need to make to answer the multiple-choice questions correctly can sensitize you to look for and correct similar problems in your own writing The idea is to become so familiar with good writing that it becomes second nature to you You will have sharpened your writing skills so much that your first . sometimes forget to cross our ts. PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 12 4 www.petersons.com ANSWERS AND EXPLANATIONS CHECK YOUR WRITING SKILLS, PAGES 11 3 12 4 Check your answers against. voice, and precise words. CHAPTER 5: THE TOP 10 RULES OF EFFECTIVE WRITING 13 1 www.petersons.com Part II Practicing Standard English for Writing In Chapters 6 through 9, you will learn • Basic information. its literary audience. PART I: PRACTICING YOUR ESSAY WRITING SKILLS 11 6 www.petersons.com Rewrite the following passages, eliminating overly emotional words and flowery language. 18 . Reggie’s decision