KHANH LY ENGL II The Writing Process Where I''''m From Where I''''m From I am from clothespins, line 1 from Clorox and carbon tetrachloride I am from the dirt under the back porch (Black, glistening, it tas[.]
Where I'm From I am from clothespins, line from Clorox and carbon-tetrachloride I am from the dirt under the back porch (Black, glistening, it tasted like beets.) line I am from the forsythia bush the Dutch elm whose long-gone limbs I remember as if they were my own I'm from fudge and eyeglasses, line 10 from Imogene and Alafair I'm from the know-it-alls and the pass-it-ons, from Perk up! and Pipe down! I'm from He restoreth my soul…………………………………… line 15 with a cottonball lamb and ten verses I can say myself I'm from Artemus and Billie's Branch, fried corn and strong coffee From the finger my grandfather lost…………………… ……… line 20 to the auger, the eye my father shut to keep his sight Under my bed was a dress box spilling old pictures, a sift of lost faces…………………………………………………….…….line 25 to drift beneath my dreams I am from those moments-snapped before I budded -leaf-fall from the family tree Step 1: Prewriting Answering the following questions will help prepare you to write your “Where I’m From” poem Think about what makes you YOU 15 minutes 1 Describe where you live What does it look like? What does it smell like? What does it feel like? (This could be your actual house, or it could be another place that represents where you are from – neighborhood, city, state) I lived in Ho Chi Minh city - the largest city of a small S-shaped country in Southeast Asia, its capital is Hanoi What objects or belongings can be found in your home or room? (List at least three.) Objects found in my house or room are the albums of all pictures that saved all memories of my family, the picture of my grandpa because he died when I was young What are the names of people in your “family” (they could be alive or deceased, they not need to be blood relatives)? Try to go back as far as you can in your family tree My grandparents - Mich and Hoa, my mother - Thi, my sister - Khanh, my mother’s brothers and sisters (my uncles) and all my cousins (my mother’s brothers and sisters’ childrens) They are my family List two or three family traditions Celebrate every holiday together, Celebrate Lunar New Year, Go to church every Sunday, What phrases, words or sayings are important to you or to members of your family? A phrase that is important to me is No Pain, No Gain A word that is important to all members of my family is Respect What are some beliefs that represent where you are from? (religious/spiritual/cultural) Go to Catholic church every Sunday Celebrate Lunar New Year What foods are important to you or your family? Vietnamese food is the best for my family List or important childhood memories - Playing traditional games in my country I remember the times when I was young, I didn’t have to worry or think about anything like studying, just play and enjoy my childhood Describe the weather where you are from There are main seasons - dry season and rainy season 10 What people where you are from? They are busy people Some go to work and some go to school The people usually spend their time with their family on the weekend - Saturday and Sunday 11 What are your favorite things to do? - Playing games with my family Meeting and eating with my family Step 2: Rough Draft Use the “Where I’m From” handout to complete your rough draft 15 minutes First Stanza: I am from (specific ordinary item) _a combination of five fundamental tastes _ from (product name) _Nam Ngu _ and (another product name) Three Ladies Brand I am from the (home description) a land of staggering natural beauty and cultural complexities, of dynamic megacities and hill-tribe villages (adjective that describes the above home description) _crowed, affable, bustle _, It (tasted, sounded, looked , felt –choose one) _is long, narrow country shaped like the letter S. _ I am from the (plant, flower, or natural item) Lotus flower , the (plant, flower, or natural item) coffee (description of natural item) _strong taste, thick brew of the coffee makes for a different, distinctive taste that everyone will never forget _ I’m from the (family tradition) love and respect of each member and (family trait) closest friends from (name of family member) Hoa and (name of family member) Thi and (another name) _Khanh _ I’m from the (description of family tendency) _enjoying every meals togther _ and (another family tendency) praying everynight Second Stanza: From (something you were told as a child) _failure is the mother of success _ and (another thing you were told as a child) no pain, no gain I’m from (representation of religious or spiritual beliefs or lack of it) crucifix _, (further description of spiritual beliefs) the Dove I’m from (place of birth and family ancestry) _largest city in a small country in Southeast Asia _, (two food items that represent your ancestry) strong taste of coffee and _the sauce of macerated fish or shirmp _ From the (specific family story with a detail about a specific person) _strict teachings from the deceased grandpa _ the (another detail of another family member) _tender care from my granmother _ I am from (general statement with DETAILS about who you are or where you are from) Ho Chi Minh city - largest city of a small country in Southeast Asia and Le family Step 3: Edit, Proofread, & Revise - Part 1: Self Review Revise your poem Read your poem to yourself Then think how you could make it better Use signal verbs This means you are looking for places where you should be more specific, descriptive, or could include a poetic device Can your reader visualize what you are describing? minutes - Part 2: Peer Review Exchange your poem with a classmate After reading their poem, you will write one positive comment and one comment of improvement minutes Write positive comment Write comment of improvement (What did you like? What did they well?) (What could they better? What was confusing?) Name of reader: Nathalia Comment: I love this statement that said, “I am from a land of staggering natural beauty and cultural complexities, of dynamic megacities and hill-tribe villages.” The way the writer of the poem used descriptive words was magnificent Name of reader: Nathalia Comment: This writer could’ve shortened some of the sentences Lastly, the last stanza the writer used basically the same thing that they used before and that kind threw me off in a way - Part 3: Make the changes Using the above document, make the changes your partner suggested.This is your final draft minutes Step 4: Publish Share your poem with the class, please 😀 Do Now 08/24 I am from the rubby house it creates a comfortable emotion like home the waves and the sounds from the beach, the sunlight and shiny I’m from the family gatherings And the schnozes I’m from the taciturn family and the sportsmanships I’m from the crucifix the Catholicism I’m from Meyers and Criffitts family My poem: I am from a combination of five fundamental tastes from Nam Ngu and Three Ladies Brand I am from a land of staggering natural beauty and cultural complexities, of dynamic megacities and hill-tribe villages crowed, affable, bustle It is a long, narrow country shaped like the letter S I am from the Lotus flower, the coffee the strong taste, thick brew of the coffee makes for a different, distinctive taste that everyone will never forget I’m from the love and respect of each member and closest friends from Hoa and Thi and Khanh I’m from the enjoying every meals together and praying every night From “Failure is the mother of success” and “No pain, No gain” I’m from the Catholicism I’m from the largest city in a small country in Southeast Asia, strong taste of coffee and the sauce of macerated fish or shrimp From the strict teachings from the deceased grandpa and the tender care from my grandmother I am from Ho Chi Minh city - largest city of a small country in Southeast Asia and from Le family ... shrimp From the strict teachings from the deceased grandpa and the tender care from my grandmother I am from Ho Chi Minh city - largest city of a small country in Southeast Asia and from Le family... forget _ I’m from the (family tradition) love and respect of each member and (family trait) closest friends from (name of family member) Hoa and (name of family member) Thi... the taciturn family and the sportsmanships I’m from the crucifix the Catholicism I’m from Meyers and Criffitts family My poem: I am from a combination of five fundamental tastes from Nam Ngu and