ielts writing - analyse task 2

IELTS Writing Task How to structure an essay with the topic asking you to give opinion positive or negative advantages or disadvantages agree or disagree discuss both of views and give your own opinions With these types of topics, you should organize your essay by discussing both of views and give your own view Even if you totally agree with one view, you still should need one paragraph to talk about what you disagree In the introduction: just paraphrase the topic In Body: paragraph for the opinion that you disagree with or paragraphs for the opinion that you agree and link to your conclusion In Conclusion: Paraphrase the topic again concluding with your own view These following sample answers will provide you the ideas how to structure your essay in the good ways to save your time and help you to make the ideas quickly for writing task in writing test Remember that you just have 40 to 45 minutes to write task Write down the key words in topic and find out synonyms, collocations many words which are relative to the topic as much as you can It will not only help you to build up your vocabularies but also help to paraphrase your topic and apply it into introduction and conclusion of your essay Hope these model answers will give you some ideas how to write an essay to get the best result for your actual writing test! TOPIC 1: Organized tour to remote community and other countries is increasingly popular Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and environment? Sample Essay      Remote community = secluded parts of the world, rural areas, remote area, remote and un-spoilt areas, distant regions Increasingly popular = the burgeoning growth, ever-increasing popularity, increment, rise Positive = beneficial, perks Negative = adverse outcomes, negative impacts, detrimental effects The local people and environment = the locals and the environmental quality           Organized tours = package tours Tourist arrivals, incoming tourists Entertainment facilities, transport infrastructure, better amenities Lush and verdant space, far flung retreats Negative = adverse outcomes, negative impacts, detrimental effects The local people and environment = the locals and the environmental quality Organized tours = package tours Tourist arrivals, incoming tourists Entertainment facilities, transport infrastructure, better amenities Lush and verdant space, far flung retreats The past few years have witnessed the burgeoning growth of organized tours to secluded parts of the world From my perspective, this phenomenon brings both beneficial and adverse outcomes on the locals and the environmental quality The ever-increasing popularity of package tours to rural areas offers definite perks Regarding the locals, they can enjoy the amelioration in the living standard To achieve an increment in tourist arrivals and cater for the growing demand of incoming tourists, more entertainment facilities and transport infrastructure within these locations are often established and improved Such easier access to better amenities can bring more joy and make lives less difficult in remote areas As for the environment, tourists tend to show preference for lush and verdant space when it comes to what countryside or far flung retreats has to offer Thus, more trees would be planted and the air quality would then be significantly improved Positive = beneficial Topic sentence – The ever-increasing popularity of package tours to rural areas offers definite perks The locals: Main ideas – they can enjoy the amelioration in the living standard support ideas (1-2 sentences) – To achieve an increment in tourist arrivals and cater for the growing demand of incoming tourists, more entertainment facilities and transport infrastructure within these locations are often established and improved Such easier access to better amenities can bring more joy and make lives less difficult in remote areas The environment: Support ideas – tourists tend to show preference for lush and verdant space when it comes to what countryside or far flung retreats has to offer Main ideas – Thus, more trees would be planned and the air quality would then be significantly improved However, there can also be certain negative impacts brought by this trend that are worth mentioning Firstly, the development of this mode of tourism may give rise to environmental degradation Organized tours often bring a massive number of tourists to remote and previously un-spoilt areas This can be explained by a significant amount of water and air pollution as environmentally unconscious tourists may throw litter or spit on the streets Secondly, tourists should also be held accountable for causing enormous disturbance to the life of locals Intrigued by the exotic way of living that they hardly encounter in their daily life, some tourists may give themselves the autonomy to interfere with local residents’ life such as freely going into their houses to explore or asking too many questions surrounding their private lives Negative = Adverse outcomes Topic sentence – However, there can also be certain negative impacts brought by this trend that are worth mentioning The environment: Main ideas – Firstly, the development of this mode of tourism may give rise to environmental degradation Support ideas (1-2 sentences) – Organized tours often bring a massive number of tourists to remote and un-spoilt areas This can be explained by a significant amount of water and air pollution as environmentally unconscious tourists may throw litter or spit on the streets The locals: Main ideas – Secondly, tourists should also be held accountable for causing enormous disturbance to the life of locals Support ideas (1-2 sentences) – Intrigued by the exotic way of living that they hardly encounter in their daily life, some tourists may give themselves the autonomy to interfere with local residents’ life such as freely going into their houses to explore or asking too many questions surrounding their private lives In conclusion, both beneficial and detrimental effects on local people and the environment can be seen as a result of the rise in trips to distant regions TOPIC 2: There have been many inventions in human history, such as the wheel Some people think the most important thing is the internet To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion? MODEL ESSAY   Inventions = discover Internet = digital era In the ancient era, the human race discovered how to create fire, invented the wheel and laid the foundation for today’s printing technology Later on, in the industrial era, they built more complex machinery and started to use motorized vehicles Although all these facilities have proved their great significance to all mankind throughout history, some state that the single most important invention is the Internet From my perspective, such a statement is an exaggeration, despite some benefits of the Internet AGREE In this digital era, the Internet helps store, communicate and disseminate information in a fast and convenient way As a key method of storing data, there is an increasingly high number of people uploading their files onto the Internet Microsoft’s OneDrive, for example, is a cloud storage that provide file storage services for tens of millions of people Furthermore, as an important means of communication, the Internet enables people to get in touch with their friends easily This can be clearly seen in the case of Snap Chat, a messaging application with millions of users monthly Finally, the Internet serves as an important tool that facilitates the dissemination of information An excellent example of this is Facebook, a social network that acts as a virtual platform helping one spread their ideas whenever and wherever they want Topic Sentence: In this digital era, the Internet helps store, communicate and disseminate information in a fast and convenient way Main Ideas 1: As a key method of storing data, there is an increasingly high number of people uploading their files onto the Internet Support idea: Microsoft’s OneDrive, for example, is a cloud storage that provide file storage services for tens of millions of people Main Ideas 2: as an important means of communication, the Internet enables people to get in touch with their friends easily Support idea: This can be clearly seen in the case of Snap Chat, a messaging application with millions of users monthly Main Ideas 3: the Internet serves as an important tool that facilitates the dissemination of information Support idea: An excellent example of this is Facebook, a social network that acts as a virtual platform helping one spread their ideas whenever and wherever they want DISAGREE Although the power of the Internet cannot be overstated, I firmly believe that there are even more valuable inventions The first is electricity, without which almost all electronic devices cannot function In other words, the Internet could be of no use if there were no electricity The second is engines, which can be seen in a great diversity of facilities, from the old hydropower locomotives to today’s luxury solar-powered aeroplanes If there were no engines, people would have to use animal-powered or human-powered vehicles, which are often much slower than their motorized counterparts To illustrate, the top pace of an average camel is 30 miles per hour, half that of a car on a highway The final and most important discovery, from my point of view, is mobile phones, which are the physical platform for various forms of digital communication Today, billions are using mobile phones to make calls and send text messages on a daily basis, a much greater number than that of those using the Internet for the same purpose Topic Sentence: Although the power of the Internet cannot be overstated, I firmly believe that there are even more valuable inventions Main Ideas 1: The first is electricity, without which almost all electronic devices cannot function In other words, the Internet could be of no use if there were no electricity Main Ideas 2: The second is engines, which can be seen in a great diversity of facilities, from the old hydropower locomotives to today’s luxury solar-powered aeroplanes Support idea: If there were no engines, people would have to use animal-powered or humanpowered vehicles, which are often much slower than their motorized counterparts To illustrate, the top pace of an average camel is 30 miles per hour, half that of a car Main Ideas 3: The final and most important discovery, from my point of view, is mobile phones, which are the physical platform for various forms of digital communication Support idea: Today, billions are using mobile phones to make calls and send text messages on a daily basis, a much greater number than that of those using the Internet for the same purpose To sum up, the Internet has some enormous advantages for the human race, but there are even more significant discoveries, including electricity, engines and mobile phones I predict that along with the Internet, these three inventions will still be the cornerstones of future humanity TOPIC 3: Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like tennis or swimming Discuss both views and give your own opinion Sample Answer   Team sports = play in teams, work as a team, participate in team sports Individual sports= play individually, solo sport, doing sport individually Some claim that team sports such as football are more beneficial to players Meanwhile, others hold a belief that sports that are played individually have superior advantages In my opinion, both types of sports bring equal advantages TEAM SPORT On the one hand, by participating in team sport, we learn to collaborate with others In sport fields, individual ambition takes second place to team objective Every team member is working towards a common goal To achieve this goal, cooperation and coordination are of the essence Members must work as a team and achieve the maximum synergy even if that means someone has to make certain sacrifices For instance, a cyclist may take the leading position for half of the game and then drop out so as to ensure the victory of his teammate Or another case in point is that in football, a player may have to sacrifice the opportunity to score a goal to pass the ball to his team player if the chance of a goal being score is higher with his teammate Main idea: On the one hand, by participating in team sport, we learn to collaborate with others In sport fields, individual ambition takes second place to team objective Topic sentence: Every team member is working towards a common goal To achieve this goal, cooperation and coordination are of the essence Members must work as a team and achieve the maximum synergy even if that means someone has to make certain sacrifices Support ideas 1: For instance, a cyclist may take the leading position for half of the game and then drop out so as to ensure the victory of his teammate Support ideas 2: Or another case in point is that in football, a player may have to sacrifice the opportunity to score a goal to pass the ball to his team player if the chance of a goal being score is higher with his teammate INDIVIDUAL SPORT On the other hand, solo sports can bring players a number of benefits, one of which is the cultivation and maximization of personal capacities To be precise, when being without the assistance of others, one has to exert himself to the utmost to come up with solutions to win, and this challenges his own limits For example, in tennis, a player has to strategize his ball serves, predict where the ball falls and be agile in his movement, and he has to multi-task all these on his own Besides, when doing sports individually, people are liberated from the constraint of rigidly following a previously agreed plan, thereby having the freedom to experiment on new ways of playing Therefore, such players often have a high sense of satisfaction Topic Sentence: On the other hand, solo sports can bring players a number of benefits, one of which is the cultivation and maximization of personal capacities Main idea 1: To be precise, when being without the assistance of others, one has to exert himself to the utmost to come up with solutions to win, and this challenges his own limits Support idea: For example, in tennis, a player has to strategize his ball serves, predict where the ball falls and be agile in his movement, and he has to multi-task all these on his own Support idea: Besides, when doing sports individually, people are liberated from the constraint of rigidly following a previously agreed plan, thereby having the freedom to experiment on new ways of playing  Topic sentence: Therefore, such players often have a high sense of satisfaction In conclusion, each type of sports has its merits in cultivating players’ personality development It should depend on each player as to what sports they should TOPIC 4: Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to any sports or activity Discuss both views and give your own opinion Sample Answers   dangerous sports = extreme sports Individual sports= The media commonly provide a barrage of news about dangerous sports, because the deaths and injuries associated with them often make for spectacular headlines As a result, some people have claimed that all extreme sports should be banned, although I would argue that such a policy would be out of all proportion to the real risks involved DANGEROUS SPORTS SHOULD BE BANNED Those in favor of prohibiting people from taking part in dangerous sports tend to focus on the risk element Even when individuals may be physically and mentally prepared to participate in extreme sports activities, and even when they have all the right equipment, the dangers are everpresent For example, few sports are as challenging and fraught with danger as BASE jumping Participants hurl themselves off cliffs or tall buildings, and few escapes without suffering severe bruising or acute abdominal pains which normally last for several days In addition, although sports equipment rarely malfunctions, this may still happen and the consequences may be fatal – such as a BASE jumper’s parachute failing to deploy The supporters of legislation to ban dangerous sports argue that such tragic outcomes not only affect the individual victims, but also leave mental scars which their families then have to live with for the rest of their lives Topic Sentence: Those in favor of prohibiting people from taking part in dangerous sports tend to focus on the risk element Main idea 1: Even when individuals may be physically and mentally prepared to participate in extreme sports activities, and even when they have all the right equipment, the dangers are everpresent Support ideas: For example, few sports are as challenging and fraught with danger as BASE jumping Participants hurl themselves off cliffs or tall buildings, and few escapes without suffering severe bruising or acute abdominal pains which normally last for several days Main idea 2: In addition, although sports equipment rarely malfunctions, this may still happen and the consequences may be fatal – such as a BASE jumper’s parachute failing to deploy The supporters of legislation to ban dangerous sports argue that such tragic outcomes not only affect the individual victims, but also leave mental scars which their families then have to live with for the rest of their lives LEAVE IT FREEDOM However, I support the view of those who contend that participation in extreme sports must be a matter of personal choice Firstly, overcoming physical challenges may be a springboard for positive personal transformation It may make a person stronger and more determined, and the experience may be a life-changing one Secondly, the rigors of preparation in order to take part in mountain-climbing, white-water rafting or other such extremely strenuous activities demonstrate that an individual is in peak health and physical condition Finally, there is an ethical aspect which dictates that a person should have the freedom to pursue the challenges which they set themselves, even though this may involve a level of risk that others might find unacceptable Topic Sentence: However, I support the view of those who contend that participation in extreme sports must be a matter of personal choice Main idea 1: Firstly, overcoming physical challenges may be a springboard for positive personal transformation Support ideas: It may make a person stronger and more determined, and the experience may be a life-changing one Main idea 2: Secondly, the rigors of preparation in order to take part in mountain-climbing, white-water rafting or other such extremely strenuous activities demonstrate that an individual is in peak health and physical condition Main idea 3: Finally, there is an ethical aspect which dictates that a person should have the freedom to pursue the challenges which they set themselves, even though this may involve a level of risk that others might find unacceptable In conclusion, while acknowledging the real risks, I would defend the right of any individual to take part in the extreme sport of their choice TOPIC 5: The news media have become too much influence in people lives today and this is a negative development To what extent you agree or disagree? This topic is only one point of view, and you just answer agree or disagree with this view, so in the body of essay, all of paragraphs will be support for one view, agree or disagree Sample Answer Many people believe that the news media have been exerting negative effects on people’s lives, which is an undesirable phenomenon I completely agree with this view AGREE The scenario of the public’s growing dependence on news outlets in either print or non-print forms means that people are being instilled with skewed or unreliable information Many news channels perpetually loop the same pieces of news all day long, hammering them in the minds of unsuspecting audience These media houses are often corporate sell-outs that publish news to earn profits or boost their ratings, and negatively cater to the masses by putting out the most sensational news stories For example, XYZ — a popular news channel — often gives overlyfocused accounts of events such as the scandal of a celebrity or the anticipated demise of the human race, simply to hook viewers Topic Sentence: The scenario of the public’s growing dependence on news outlets in either print or non-print forms means that people are being instilled with skewed or unreliable information Main idea: Many news channels perpetually loop the same pieces of news all day long, hammering them in the minds of unsuspecting audience These media houses are often corporate sell-outs that publish news to earn profits or boost their ratings, and negatively cater to the masses by putting out the most sensational news stories Support idea: For example, XYZ — a popular news channel — often gives overly-focused accounts of events such as the scandal of a celebrity or the anticipated demise of the human race, simply to hook viewers AGREE The freedom of news in sharing opinions about any issue is also thought to seed stereotypical judgments into people’s thinking This is an unfavorable situation, especially in developing or underdeveloped countries where the majority of people are not rational enough to sift through news and recognize the truth As a result, the audience will be thrown into a state of panic and jump to undesirable actions to protect themselves For instance, the recent news that the state will pay only 3000 US dollars maximum for those with savings account if a bank goes bankrupt has made people withdraw all their money for fear of losing everything Topic Sentence: The freedom of news in sharing opinions about any issue is also thought to seed stereotypical judgments into people’s thinking Main idea: This is an unfavorable situation, especially in developing or underdeveloped countries where the majority of people are not rational enough to sift through news and recognize the truth As a result, the audience will be thrown into a state of panic and jump to undesirable actions to protect themselves Support idea: For instance, the recent news that the state will pay only 3000 US dollars maximum for those with savings account if a bank goes bankrupt has made people withdraw all their money for fear of losing everything In conclusion, I believe that the influence of the media is excessively negative, leaving people with distorted thoughts and fear TOPIC 6: People are living longer Some people think that it causes big problems Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and for society in general Discuss both views & give your own opinion MODEL ANSWER Sample Answers   Living longer = aging population, elderly citizens Big problems= negative consequences There is little room for doubt that there has been a staggering growth in the proportion of elderly people in many countries In my opinion, I believe that this trend brings both advantages and disadvantages to society as a whole DISADVANTAGES On one hand, it is inevitable that the remarkable increase in life expectancy has some negative consequences for some reasons Firstly, the aging population can impose a heavy pressure on the economy and the healthcare system as the more people retire, the heavier the pension burden the state has to carry Hospitals will be flooded with frail and infirm elderly citizens searching for medical treatments while the labor force also suffers due to the shortage of productive workers who often make the biggest contribution to society Secondly, more old people would pose a burden to families as parents would have to take care of older family members, and no doubt aged citizens tend to be meddlesome and stubborn, causing frequent conflicts probably Topic Sentence On one hand, it is inevitable that the remarkable increase in life expectancy has some negative consequences for some reasons Main idea 1: Firstly, the aging population can impose a heavy pressure on the economy and the healthcare system as the more people retire, the heavier the pension burden the state has to carry Support idea: Hospitals will be flooded with frail and infirm elderly citizens searching for medical treatments while the labor force also suffers due to the shortage of productive workers who often make the biggest contribution to society Main idea 2: Secondly, more old people would pose a burden to families as parents would have to take care of older family members, and no doubt aged citizens tend to be meddlesome and stubborn, causing frequent conflicts probably ADVANTAGES On the positive side, the benefits of this development should not be underestimated First, they are able to contribute to some sectors such as teaching, management, scientific research and politics thanks to their extensive experience We often see top executives in their 50s doing consultation sessions and help companies function more efficiently, or old teachers coaching students for contests because of their vast knowledge and hands-on experience Second, as most people in modern times are busy with tasks at the workplace, elderly members like grandparents can the babysitting, relieving parents’ worries of their children lacking in moral support or leisure activities Topic Sentence On the positive side, the benefits of this development should not be underestimated Main idea 1: First, they are able to contribute to some sectors such as teaching, management, scientific research and politics thanks to their extensive experience Support idea: We often see top executives in their 50s doing consultation sessions and help companies function more efficiently, or old teachers coaching students for contests because of their vast knowledge and hands-on experience Main idea 2: Second, as most people in modern times are busy with tasks at the workplace, elderly members like grandparents can the babysitting, relieving parents’ worries of their children lacking in moral support or leisure activities In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, it seems to me that an aging population has both merits and drawbacks on society, largely depending on how we react to it TOPIC 7: More and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas Do you think it is a negative or positive development? Sample Answer     City = urban Live in home = live in houses Small space = cramped space and few Outdoor areas It is true that an increasing number of people in urban areas are living in houses with cramped space and few or no outdoor areas I think this is a negative development for some reasons below NEGATIVE Firstly, stuffy living conditions can affect people’s moods When there is little space for us to move around the house, we just lose our temper and get irritated being surrounded by four brick walls Worse still, some space outside at the porch such as a garden with beautifully grown flowers can be a good remedy for people’s stress and anxieties Without such spaces, the tension level just rises dramatically as when taking a look outside, what we can see is the bumper-tobumper traffic with cars honking and dust drifting everywhere in the air, making house owners moody all day Topic Sentence Firstly, stuffy living conditions can affect people’s moods When there is little space for us to move around the house, we just lose our temper and get irritated being surrounded by four brick walls Main idea : Worse still, some space outside at the porch such as a garden with beautifully grown flowers can be a good remedy for people’s stress and anxieties Support idea: Without such spaces, the tension level just rises dramatically as when taking a look outside, what we can see is the bumper-to-bumper traffic with cars honking and dust drifting everywhere in the air, making house owners moody all day NEGATIVE 2: Secondly, convenience and productivity also suffer as a consequence Families with many generations living under the same roof would often complain about the lack of privacy when their houses are too small and narrow The kids will feel humiliated and ashamed if they plan to invite their friends over for playing, or the father may have to abandon his hobby of playing saxophone so as to save others the nuisance of loud noises from his instrument As for me, sometimes I cannot concentrate on my schoolwork, seeing others walk back and forth in the house This just makes me get distracted and I often have to wait others to sleep and then my homework Topic Sentence: Secondly, convenience and productivity also suffer as a consequence Families with many generations living under the same roof would often complain about the lack of privacy when their houses are too small and narrow Main idea :The kids will feel humiliated and ashamed if they plan to invite their friends over for playing, or the father may have to abandon his hobby of playing saxophone so as to save others the nuisance of loud noises from his instrument Support idea: As for me, sometimes I cannot concentrate on my schoolwork, seeing others walk back and forth in the house This just makes me get distracted and I often have to wait others to sleep and then my homework In conclusion, from what I think and from my personal experience, living in a small house is too disadvantageous, so this is definitely a negative development on the whole TOPIC 8: Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government Do you agree or disagree? MODEL ANSWER There is no doubt that environment-related issues ought to be held responsible for by an international organization instead of individual countries I disagree with this statement for some reasons DISAGREE There are numerous environmental issues such as climate change, melting glaciers and intensifying greenhouse effect happening on a global scale As the argument goes, an international organization would act as a leader, issuing principles for all member countries to conform to or it will have sufficient financial capabilities to support the improvement of the environment Cited cases are the Kyoto protocol has contributed to the slowing down of climate change on the earth, or the United Nations’ support for Third World countries have helped improve the air quality there This argument, however, fails to take into consideration the fact that compulsion often backfires if an individual nation has no intention to cooperate, or the incentives provided can make recipient countries over reliant and avoid coming up with innovative ideas to resolve their country’s environmental situation This in the long term exerts a negative overall global effect Topic sentence: There are numerous environmental issues such as climate change, melting glaciers and intensifying greenhouse effect happening on a global scale Main idea 1: As the argument goes, an international organization would act as a leader, issuing principles for all member countries to conform to or it will have sufficient financial capabilities to support the improvement of the environment Support idea: Cited cases are the Kyoto protocol has contributed to the slowing down of climate change on the earth, or the United Nations’ support for Third World countries have helped improve the air quality there Main idea 2: This argument, however, fails to take into consideration the fact that compulsion often backfires if an individual nation has no intention to cooperate, or the incentives provided can make recipient countries over reliant and avoid coming up with innovative ideas to resolve their country’s environmental situation This in the long term exerts a negative overall global effect DISAGREE I side with those who think that each governmental body should take responsibility for addressing domestic environmental problems Firstly, this practice would have a chain effect, benefiting not only the host country but also neighboring nations For instance, if China diminishes its emissions by downsizing its industrial activities to a certain acceptable level, the air contamination in Hanoi would be reduced as a consequence Secondly, the root of a complete resolution of environmental issues comes at grassroots level, only achieved by the efforts of a country’s government If walking or cycling are promoted amongst those with an inclination to use private vehicles, this can help diminish the colossal volumes of exhaust gas and ameliorate the communal air quality Or, if people are encouraged to participate in the international Earth Hour when everyone is asked to turn their lights off in sixty minutes, huge amounts of power can be minimized Enacting such events which are aimed at creating a mindset shift in the public regarding environmental protection and promoting a simple lifestyle can only be conducted by a country’s government Topic sentence: I side with those who think that each governmental body should take responsibility for addressing domestic environmental problems Main idea 1: Firstly, this practice would have a chain effect, benefiting not only the host country but also neighboring nations Support idea: For instance, if China diminishes its emissions by downsizing its industrial activities to a certain acceptable level, the air contamination in Hanoi would be reduced as a consequence Main idea 2: Secondly, the root of a complete resolution of environmental issues comes at grassroots level, only achieved by the efforts of a country’s government Support idea: If walking or cycling are promoted amongst those with an inclination to use private vehicles, this can help diminish the colossal volumes of exhaust gas and ameliorate the communal air quality Or, if people are encouraged to participate in the international Earth Hour when everyone is asked to turn their lights off in sixty minutes, huge amounts of power can be minimized Enacting such events which are aimed at creating a mindset shift in the public regarding environmental protection and promoting a simple lifestyle can only be conducted by a country’s government In conclusion, uprooting environment problems should be the responsibility of each national government rather than an international organization TOPIC 9: The increase in people’s life expectancy means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age Is this alternative a positive or negative development? Sample Answer As people’s life expectancy is becoming higher every day, older citizens have to devote more of their time to work However, some decide to work at a younger age From my own perspective, this trend is positive POSITIVE Entering the workforce at an earlier age can be a good choice for people’s better financial circumstances when they become old The younger a person is, the more energetic and persistent he or she is in their job Without a shadow of a doubt, youths can perform most office-related tasks with their zeal and the best degree of their productivity They are less absent-minded and would make fewer blunders and work while being capable of multi-tasking Given this, promotion prospects are promising and they are likely to climb up the career ladder within some years As a consequence, their income could be colossal enough to well afford them for the future retirement life Topic Sentence: Entering the workforce at an earlier age can be a good choice for people’s better financial circumstances when they become old Main idea 1: The younger a person is, the more energetic and persistent he or she is in their job Without a shadow of a doubt, youths can perform most office-related tasks with their zeal and the best degree of their productivity They are less absent-minded and would make fewer blunders and work while being capable of multi-tasking Support idea: Given this, promotion prospects are promising and they are likely to climb up the career ladder within some years As a consequence, their income could be colossal enough to well afford them for the future retirement life POSITIVE Besides, unlike the old citizens who might choose to start work late or fail to make headway in their career progression, the proactive young individuals would have been wise if they opt for this alternative of working early There is more time to sample different work environments, learn new skills and meet people from diverse backgrounds without having to concern themselves about the low salary or missed opportunities triggered by job hopping They can this as long as they like since the youth age permits experience and gives them plenty of freedom to pursue their dreams The salary then still accumulates in value, but the youths have job satisfaction and live their life to the fullest Topic sentence: Besides, unlike the old citizens who might choose to start work late or fail to make headway in their career progression, the proactive young individuals would have been wise if they opt for this alternative of working early Main idea: There is more time to sample different work environments, learn new skills and meet people from diverse backgrounds without having to concern themselves about the low salary or missed opportunities triggered by job hopping Support idea: They can this as long as they like since the youth age permits experience and gives them plenty of freedom to pursue their dreams The salary then still accumulates in value, but the youths have job satisfaction and live their life to the fullest By way of conclusion, I would contend that the contemporary situation in which young people start making a living earlier than in the past is a positive development  ... most office-related tasks with their zeal and the best degree of their productivity They are less absent-minded and would make fewer blunders and work while being capable of multi-tasking Given... most office-related tasks with their zeal and the best degree of their productivity They are less absent-minded and would make fewer blunders and work while being capable of multi-tasking Support... determined, and the experience may be a life-changing one Main idea 2: Secondly, the rigors of preparation in order to take part in mountain-climbing, white-water rafting or other such extremely strenuous