Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this and give your opinion Discuss both views Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience You should write at least 250 words Chấm bởi http://www.ieltstutor.me/ Thứ nhất là 339 từ là quá dài em, 300 từ max When it comes to the education, especially for children, parents often come up with hundreds of opinions to discuss, either it is suitable to guide their kids themselves at home or let them learn from the significant, yet messy, education system these days. I will try to draw some explainations about both aspects in this essay It is evident that we are living in a world filled with negative thoughts and behaviors beside all the small good things, which may affect children as their first interaction with the "outside world", away from parents' protection, in variable unpredictable ways. Thus, the irreplaceable role of parents has great impact to their childs' fututre. A child grew up with love and was provided attention from his parents usually becomes a kind, gracious and optimism adult. However, living under fullprotection might lead a child to be completely unaware of potential threats coming from the outside. More over, they could be influenced from their parents' bad habits due to the fact that not everyone is perfect. chị đọc bài em là chị thấy em sắp xếp ý còn lộn xộn lắm, thường 1 paragraph chỉ có 2 main ideas, trong đó có example + explanation chứ bài của em nhiều ý q í em trai ui (( On the other hand, by getting access to the education system, children likely to comprehend better sources of knowledge compared to be taught at home.In addition, there are kids come from different families, different backgound stories, approaching nearer to many faces of the world, plus being taught by teachers, which means they have the possibility of learning that how the world really works. Therefore, the unconscious development of positive solving problem skills in any circumstances are naturally generated in their brains, allows them to avoid threats and deal with particular situations in good ways. However, the chance of a child getting bullied which is a highly concerned issue recently would make a mom thinks twice before relying on school From my perspective, love is the most powerful and necessity factor keeping a child stay in parents' sight. So, no matter VẬY RỒI CUỐI CÙNG YOUR OPINION LÀ PARENTS HAY TEACHERS NÊN DẠY TO BECOME GOOD CITIZEN????? K RÕ opinion của em tức là bai này sai task response, mà sai task response là 5.5 hix đọc kĩ đề vào em nha! how is the environment they are settling in, they just need love to grow up to be a good person in thjs society. ☑️THAM️KHẢO️CHI️TIẾT️GÓI️DỊCH️VỤ️100%️ĐẠT️TARGET️Ở️ĐÂY️http://goo.gl/sdSGju️️ SAMPLE Ad cho hỏi tí Cái dạng discuss ạ, mà người ta hỏi thêm opinion nữa, mà thấy nội discuss ý thui dài rùi, chèn OPINION vào khúc ạ, có nên chèn vào kết luận làm k ? thấy thiếu thiếu phải đưa ý vào phân mà k bik đưa ? ⇒ ghi intro + conclu dc balanced view = agree body + Ad ad góp ý hộ mình nên cắt phần bây h ạ, xuống tầm 300 từ ạ, thấy phần mở dài phải k ạ, ln viết tầm 350 từ trở lên, vơ thi chắc không đủ thời gian, hôm thứ thi thử, viết dở nhiều ý đơn giản nữa, mà mém k kịp h Cho hỏi thêm phần ( Grammatical range and accuracy, Coherence and cohesion) để lên điểm ạ, sợ vào thi trúng topic lạ từ vựng đỡ không ý ad :(, ngữ pháp có phải phải dùng đa dạng cấu trúc kiểu k ạ, đảo ngữ, rút gọn, k ạ, ad bày để ơn thêm với ạ, cảm ơn ad nhiều ⇒ ko cần đảo hết, quan trọng SỰ CHÍNH XÁC , dùng don giản hết 8,0 bình thường In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on whether the responsibility to train children to become moral citizens should be fall to FALL ON //REST WITH parents or the school, with many people maintaining that it is parents’ obligation, whilst others attribute this duty to teachers Below is an essay discussing both standpoints and then giving reasons why concerted efforts from both parents and the school have my support⇒ ko cần dài dòng đơn giản state opinion ⇒ In ️my️view,️concerted️efforts️from️both️parents️and️the️school️are️necessary️ On one hand, parents are undoubtedly the most important shaper of a child ‘s behavior In other words, parents mould their children’s behavior by the way they conduct their own life, which can be illustrated by the fact that parents who regularly argue/QUARREL may find that their child both imitate them and consider this bad practice as an ideal life strategy TO SOLVE A DISAGREEMENT Furthermore, if not all, then most children regard their parents as the role model for them to emulate ⇒ repeated ideas chỗ trên, ideas phai clear ko lặp lại, meaning that they are bound to remember and obey what their parents have taught Therefore, it is safe to say that were it not for good parenting, there would be no way for kids to adopt decent behavior.️⇒️Plan️khác:️Main️point️1:️parents️are️the️closest️members️to️them,️affecting️their️daily️behaviour️(copy/emulate) ️Main️point️2:️well-mannered️children️are️the️image️of️their️parents️(parents️benefit️from️this️most) On the other hand, it goes without saying that the school has a pivotal role in children’s behavioral development, especially given that students have a tendency to spend nearly all of their time at the school As a matter of fact, such lectures on morality as how to hold the older in high regard or why to make concession to the younger might help students enormously to have righteous perspectives towards life in order not to have morally wrong behaviors It is not to mention the fact that the school also allows children to communicate with people from all walks of life, ranging from their peerS to dustmen or healthcare workers, from which there is a fair chance that children will learn to behave with different types of people in an appropriate way ⇒ ý trả lời sai câu hoi, trả lời thành what schools can do, NOT “should” All things considered, while parents are of utmost ⇒ contradict, utmost có mà phía sau kêu equally importance to the character formation of their offspring, in my mind, the school’s roles are equally important, especially considering that the competitive labor market has been depriving working parents of their time beside their kids Task response: (present a relevant position, although the conlcusion may become unclear/ contradictory) Coherence and cohesion: (main point doesn’t answer the question + repeated contents ) Lexical resource: Grammatical range and accuracy: / (excellent range , but lack excellent accuracy) ~6,5-7,0