UNITY AND COHERENCE

UNITY AND COHERENCE I UNITY One important element of a good paragraph is unity Every good paragraph has unity, which means that only ONE main idea is discussed For example, if your paragraph is about the advantages of owing a motorbike in HCMC, discuss that only Don’t write about the disadvantages or the advantages of having a car Furthermore, it is good idea for beginning academic writers to discuss only advantage, such as convenience Sometimes, it is possible to discuss several aspects of the same idea in one paragraph if they are closely related to the topic The second part of unity is that every supporting sentence must directly explain or prove the main idea that is stated in the topic sentence Do not include any information that does not directly support the topic sentence Sometimes students write supporting sentences that are “off the topic” These are called irrelevant sentences Practice 1: Both of the following paragraphs break the rule of unity because they contain one or more irrelevant sentences  Locate and underline the topic sentence of each para  Find the irrelevant sentences and cross them out a (1) Adventure travel is the hot trend in the tourism company (2)Ordinary people are no longer content to spend their two weeks away from the office resting on a sunny beach in Hawaii (3) More and more often, they are choosing to spend their vacations rafting down wild rivers, hiking through steamy rain forests, climbing the world’s highest mountains, or traversing slippery glaciers (4)People of all ages are choosing educational study tours for their vacations b (1)Daredevil sports are also becoming popular (2) Young people especially are increasingly willing to take risk life and limb while mountain biking, backcountry snowboarding, or high-speed skateboarding (3)Soccer is also becoming popular in the United States, where it was not well known until recently (4) One of the riskiest new sports is skysurfing, in which people jump out of airplanes with graphite boards attached to their feet (5)Skysurfing rivals skydiving and bungee jumping for the amount of thrills- and risk Practice 2: Decide whether the following paragraph should be divided into or more para Underline the topic sentence and find the irrelevant sentences and cross them out (1)Because the Internet makes the world a smaller place, the value of having a common language is greatly increased (2)The question is – which language? (3)Because the Internet grew up in the U.S, the largest percentage of its content is now in English (4)Bill Gates, Microsoft’s president, believes that English will remain valuable for a long time as a common language for international communication (5) His company spends $ 200 million a year translating software into other languages (6)He says, “Unless you read English passably well, you miss out on some of the Internet experience.” (7)Someday, software may be available to instantly translate both written and spoken language so well that the need for any common language could decline (8) That day is decades away, however, because flawless machine translation is a very tough problem (9) Software that does crude translations already exists (10) It is useful if all you are trying to is understand the general idea of something you see on computer screen (11)However, if you are trying to negotiate a contract or discuss a scientific subject where details are important, machine translation is totally useless (12) Computer spelling checkers also exist for various languages II COHERENCE Another element of a good paragraph is coherence The Latin verb cohere means “ hold together” In order to have coherence in writing the sentences must hold together; that is, the movement from sentence to the next must be logical and smooth There must be no sudden jumps Each sentence should flow smoothly into the next one Practice 3: In the following paragraph, the key noun is never repeated Replace some of the pronouns with appropriate singular or plural nouns (1)Dolphins are interesting because they display almost human behavior at times (2)For example, they display the human emotions of joy and sadness (3)During training, when they something correctly, they squeal excitedly and race toward their trainer (4) When they make a mistake, however, they droop noticeably and mope around their pool 5)Furthermore, they help each other when they are in trouble (6) If one is sick, it sends out a message, and the others in the area swim to help it (7)They push it to the surface of the water so that it can breathe (8)They stay with it for days or weeks- until it recovers or dies (9)They have also helped trapped or lost whales navigate their way safely out to the open sea (10)They are so intelligent and helpful (11)In fact, that the U.S Navy is training them to become underwater bomb disposal experts Practice 4: In the following paragraph, the pronouns are not consistent Correct them to make the paragraph more coherent Olympic Athletes Olympic athletes must be strong both physically and mentally First of all, if you hope to compete in an Olympic sport, you must be physically strong Furthermore, aspiring Olympians must train rigorously for many years For the most demanding sports, they train several hours a day, five or six days a week, for ten or more years In addition to being physically strong, he or she must also be mentally rough This means that you have to be totally dedicated to your sport, often giving up normal school, family, and social life Being mentally strong also means that she or he must withstand the intense pressure of international competition with its attendant media coverage Finally, not everyone can win a medal, so they must process the inner strength to live with defeat Practice 5: Insert suitable transition signals to make the following paragraph more coherent ... also exist for various languages II COHERENCE Another element of a good paragraph is coherence The Latin verb cohere means “ hold together” In order to have coherence in writing the sentences... of joy and sadness (3)During training, when they something correctly, they squeal excitedly and race toward their trainer (4) When they make a mistake, however, they droop noticeably and mope... physically and mentally First of all, if you hope to compete in an Olympic sport, you must be physically strong Furthermore, aspiring Olympians must train rigorously for many years For the most demanding