Đề thi viết IELTS The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.. model answer: The graph shows people using new music places on the Internet in fiftee
Trang 1Đề thi viết IELTS
The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below
You should write at least 150 words
model answer:
The graph shows people using new music places on the Internet in fifteen days period of time namely personal choice and trendy pop music
The overall trend shows fluctuation with slight Increased towards the end of the period Starting with Music Choice websites; 40,000 poeple went on this new site on first-day Half of them backed out the next day In Contrast to this Pop Parade net sites were visited
by 120,000 music lovers on day one which decreased slightly on the next day thereafter regaining the same fame on 3rd day
Trang 2After 3rd day the enthusiasm for both music lines on Internet dropped slowly- reaching maximum fall of 40,000 on 7th day Whereas Music choice gained popularity, slightly Improoving to get the original strength of 30,000 viewers on screen, but was getting still less visiters than their opponent Pop group i.e 40,000 on day 7
In the biegining of the next week both gained remarkable recovery after a few
fluctuations for 8th and 9th day having 40,000 and 50,000 visiters respectively, reaching
to their peaks of one and a half thousand new viewers for Pop Parade on 11th day
showing a contrast of very few people visiting Music choice for the same day Thereafter Music choice gained popularity on 12th day for having more than 120,000 new visiters
on web
In the end of the period Pop sites were visited by maximum viewers of 180,000 whereas sites located to Music choice were not explored by more than 80,000 explorers on the last day of the report
(257 words)
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score Here is the
examiner's comment:
Well organized with some good linking devices and collocations (gain popularity,
remarkable recovery, decrease slightly) and some valid comparison of the music sites However, some sentences are long and confusing (paragraph 5), some collocations are inaccurate (slight increased, reaching to their peaks) and there is some repetition (7th day, 3rd day, 11 th day) Some words are spelt incorrectly (poeple, Improoving, visiters, biegining)